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GRE写作范文赏析,好文章就要这样写出彩!

2019-06-19 11:34:28

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对于刚开始GRE写作备考的同学来说,范文是一个很好的工具。宏观上,阅读范文可以让我们更好地了解考试的要求,明确写作的目标;微观上,我们也可以从范文中学习到一些好的具体的语言表达方式,有助于我们写的更准确更地道。


这篇文章里,我选了一篇很典型的北美范文给大家参考,大家在学习这篇范文的同时,也可以结合本文思考一下自己要如何学习范文。首先,这个范文所对应的题目如下:



Many important discoveries or creations are accidental: it is usually while seeking the answer to one question that we come across the answer to another.


Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.



这个题目属于学习研究类话题,这个话题总体难度属于中等,下面我们来看这个范文。



开头段



I must admit that important discoveries of the past lend considerable support to the statement. However, for further analysis we need to make careful differentiation between “discoveries” and“creations”, and the statement overstates the role of accident, or serendipity,when it comes to modern-day discoveries and creations.


首先,我们从段落结构上看,第一句话属于让步,引出第二句话的however转折内容,表明作者对原题目的观点主要是反对的态度。其次,从内容上看,我们可以预测,作者很可能会写三个主要内容,一个是让步的部分,一个是具体区分“discoveries” 和“creations”,另一个是说明原文为什么overstates the role of accident, or serendipity, when it comes to modern-day discoveries and creations。最后,语言部分,这里面有一个词组可以关注,叫做lend considerable support to,意思上等于support支持。



第二段



Many discoveries are indeed accidental,for many of them often occur unexpectedly when people are in the quest for something else-such as an answer to an unrelated question or a solution to an unrelated problem. Various geographical, scientific, and anthropological discoveries aptly illustrate this point. In search of a trade route to the WestIndies Columbus discovered instead a continent unknown to Europeans; and during the course of an unrelated experiment Fleming accidentally discovered penicillin. In search of answers to questions about marine organisms,oceanographers often happen upon previously undiscovered, and important,archeological artifacts and geological phenomena. Conversely, in their quest to understand the earth’s structure and history geologists often stumble on important human artifacts.


这一段首先提出论点,对原文在一定程度上表示同意,然后就是论证过程,使用了举例的论证方法,分别从geographical, scientific, and anthropological discoveries这三个角度进行论证。这些例子大家可以顺便收集一下备用。语言部分,这里面有表示偶然性的两个动词词组可以积累,一个是happen upon偶遇,另一个是stumble on偶然发现



第三段



In light of the forgoing examples, “intentional discovery” might seem to be non-existent; yetin fact it is not. There are also many important discoveries which are anticipated and sought out purposefully. Marie Curie’s discovery of the element of radium after elaborate efforts could serve as an apt example. Also, in the efforts to find new celestial bodies, astronomers using increasingly powerful telescopes do indeed find them. Biochemists often discover important new vaccines and other biological and chemical agents for the curing, preventing,and treating of diseases not by stumbling on them in search of something else but rather through methodical search for these discoveries. In fact, in today’s world discovery is becoming increasingly an anticipated result of careful planning and methodical research, for the reason that scientific advancement now requires significant resources that only large corporations and governments possess. These entities are accountable to their shareholders and constituents,who demand clear strategies and objectives so that they can see a return ontheir investment.


结构上,这一段首先反驳上文,并进行举例论证来支持自己的反驳。同时,提出一个作者自己的新论点In fact, in today’s world discovery is becoming increasingly ananticipated result of careful planning and methodical research,并从原理角度进行分析和支持。这个原理的论证部分逻辑清晰,内容也很独到和精彩,可以积累下来。语言上,In light of是根据的意思,等同于based on,这个经常使用,可以积累下来。



第四段



In marked contrast to discoveries, how creations typically come about is totally different because of the very definition of the term itself. Creations are by nature products of their creator’s purposeful designs. Humankind’s key creations, such as the printing press, the internal combustion engine, and semi-conductor technology, sprung quite intentionally from the inventor’s imagination and objectives. It iscrucial to distinguish here between a creation and the spin-offs from that creation, which the original creator may or may not foresee. For instance, the engineers at some universities who originally created the ARPANET as a means to transfer data among themselves certainly intended to create that network for that purpose. What these engineers did not intend to create, however, was what would eventually evolve into the infrastructure for mass media and communications, and even commerce. Yet the ARPANET itself was no accident, no rare the many creations that it spawned, such as the World Wide Web and the countless creations that the Web has in turn spawned.


这一段对应首段里面的for further analysis we need to make careful differentiation between “discoveries” and “creations”,主要说creations要有目的地创造,并且举例进行过证明。这个例子讲Internet的产生,可以积累。语言上,spin-off是副产品的意思,spawn有产卵,引申义为产生。



结尾段



In sum, the statement has overlooked acrucial distinction between the nature of discovery and the nature of creation.Although serendipity has always played a key role in many important discoveries, at least up till now, purposeful intent is necessarily the key to human creation.


这一段的主要目的就是重复一下论点,作者把正文段里面的几点换了一个方式重述了一遍。我们写的文章里,结尾段不需要写的多精彩,也这样写就好。


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最后,这个文章总体来说,整体总分总结构非常清晰,开头结尾段与正文段内容的对应一目了然。这是我们最应该也是比较容易去学习借鉴的地方。此外,文章的例子非常丰富,而且叙述得很好,无论从例子内容本身,还是例子的表达方式上都值得大家积累学习。



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